Introducing Storyline Review Services
Most Kwik users are publishing stories for the first time. Their amazing excitement sometimes goes down when a reviewer says “the story is confuse” or “illustrations are gorgeous but story not much”. To avoid (real) situations like that, we are offering a new service called Storyline Review.
We have partnered with experienced, many times published, author and illustrator, Anna Hines, a long time Kwik user, to provide a detailed critique on how to improve your story, BEFORE starting to create your storybook app (with Kwik or with any other product or vendor). Save your time, money and frustration! Feel free to check Anna’s thoughts on this service.
I strongly believe Anna’s input will help to improve your stories and, consequently, increase your chances of getting better reviews, sales and awards (Anna has several of them in her career).
How does it work?
In a few words, after purchasing the review service, you log using your Kwiksher account, and submit your manuscript (it can be a text, storyboard, etc – just try to detail every point of your story). Our reviewer will provide comments, most times in up to 48 hours, so you will be able to improve your plot, if needed, before starting developing your app. You may exchange some last notes with our reviewer, who will reply back to you and close your request.
Below, a sample extract of what you may get (a real feedback from Anna to a Kwik user, who follow her advice and improved his story a lot):
Why does <the character> get angry? Since they are fighting I would think that they are all angry. Does something happen in the fight that makes <the character> even angrier, angry enough to explode?
When <the character> explodes does he become light? Is that why <other character> turning on the light is kind of the same? I mean there is a burst of light, and <other character> thinks the <the character> has exploded, but then realizes the light has come from his <another character> flipping the switch. Is that what you mean? I had to think pretty hard to make this connection, and even then it puzzles me, because <the character> is scary, but the light is friendly, so if I follow that thinking, it is <the character>‘s anger that makes him explode and become friendly. Do you really mean to say that anger triggers the good thing?
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Can something happen that makes <the character> stop the action… and we wonder along with <other character>… is he angry? …is he going to explode?
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One of the things I like in your story is that <other character> faces <the character> by …, and finds that it’s not so scary after all. It would be stronger if I knew what causes the change. One of the first “rules” I learned is that for a story to be emotionally satisfying for a child the main character has to have a problem, and that he has to do something HIMSELF to solve that problem. To make this the best story, the something that causes the <the character> to laugh, would be something that <other character>, perhaps through …, does. Maybe they play a trick or make a joke? <the character> stops in his tracks. Whoa! Is he angry? Will he explode? and so on… Then <other character> has changed the scary <the character> into a happy thing.
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Act fast and get a $25 discount!
All review services purchased in March will enjoy an introductory price of $75 (regular price is $100). Have already an story in mind? Check it with one of the best and enjoy this 25% off discount!
As always, please share your comments, feedback and suggestions.
